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Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is considered by certain professors that international
student
 exchange has a positive impact on
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students
. In my
opinion
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 the advantages of living in a new culture and learning new
information
overcomes
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 the drawbacks of leaving home and speaking another language. On one hand, studying abroad offers the unique opportunity of learning new useful
information
.
In other words
,
students
 have the chance to see what kind of
information
 is taught in different countries, which are the teaching methods and how problems are tackled.
For instance
, in Romania
students
 listen to the
information
 given by their professors while in Western countries they are encouraged to search data in various media and to ask questions. Another advantageous thing is the chance to live in another culture.
Students
 can directly interact with their fellow colleagues from other societies and understand or even practice their habits.
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example
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 they can taste local food or take part in
student
 parties.
On the other hand
, international
student
 exchange implies leaving the comfort zone
from
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home and living in a foreign place. It implies that they have to
temporary
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 give up on
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 daily routine and social activities and adapt to a new world.
For instance
, if they live with their parents, they do not have to worry about food or other supplies while when abroad they will have to manage all the aspects of their life.
Nevertheless
,
this
 could be a good life experience helping them to become responsible adults. Another disadvantage is the need to speak the local language or an international one
instead
 of their mother tongue. As most of the
students
 are not native English
speaker
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this
 could be a problem as they might have some gaps in their vocabulary.
For
example
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 when a Romanian
student
 goes to Spain they will have to speak either Spanish or English.
However
,
practicing
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 a foreign language would enlarge their horizons and improve their lexicon. In conclusion, the teacher’s thoughts that international
student
 exchange is a useful experience for all adolescents
is
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 supported by heavy arguments that overcome by far the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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