Some believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion?
With the development of social equality,
gender
equality has become a heated topics
. While some think that Correct the article-noun agreement
topic
women
have right
to do any Correct article usage
the right
job
they want, others believe that women
cannot do some special jobs
. Personally, I do agree
the view that there should not have any limitations on Add the preposition
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toagree
withagree
women
's choice
, they can do any Fix the agreement mistake
choices
job
they want.
In terms of individuals, the stereotype
that women
are not suitable to do certain works have
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has
an adverse effects
not only for Correct the article-noun agreement
an adverse effect
adverse effects
women
,
but for men. On the one hand, Remove the comma
apply
Once
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apply
this
thought that women
only suit some low-paying jobs
such
as nurses, secretaries, teachers and healthy workers forms a stereotype
, which is not beneficial to bridging the gender
pay gap. If the gender
pay gap is widen
, Wrong verb form
widened
women
are reluctant to go to work, which means they are more likely to experience domestic violence because they depend on their husband
. Fix the agreement mistake
husbands
On the other hand
, this
stereotype
will develop a
discrimination. One man, Remove the article
apply
for instance
, who are interested in teaching children but because of this
gender
stereotype
will do a job
he dislike
, which will lower his well-being.
Obviously, Change the verb form
dislikes
such
detrimental effects also
have a knock-on impact throughout society. Taken
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Taking
jobs
as an example, there is a stereotype
that women
are not suitable in
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for
political
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the political
a political
job
. If a country's political officials are all men, the country's laws made by men will Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
favor
males, which undermines Change the spelling
favour
women
's rights. For
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From
an
stable perspective, Change the article
a
this
job
discrimination will lead to more gender
conflicts that will damage a country's cohesion.
In conclusion, while it is true that there are still are
stereotypes that Unnecessary verb
apply
women
are not good at particularly jobs
, it is problematic that some still keeps
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keep
this
discrimination. This
view inevitably has negative impacts on individuals' physical and mental health, as well as the cohesion of communities.Submitted by 1980987589 on
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