You’ve read an article about the company you work for in a business magazine. The article contains information that is wrong. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: • give details of the magazine • explain what information about your company is wrong • suggest what you think your manager should do

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to provide you with information about the recent present

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business magazine. I have read all in the book which the company that I am working with,

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, I found a mistake from the ending of the magazine. At

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we usually publish about the restaurant business but the problem is some of

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that provide the way to achieve was wrong meaning,

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trouble will not happen if all staff carefully reviews properly.

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edit it as soon as possible.

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, the company will be treated still be believable.

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, we will find out the reason

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prevention.

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problem will not occur with our company in the future. Thank you Sincerely your Pair

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 8.0

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7 paragraphs

153 words

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