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What are the advantages and disadvantages for children of watching television? Discuss both sides.

#children #television
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,In the modern lifestyle screen timing for
children
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 is more than a decade before, reasons can be time-pass, studies, general knowledge, gaming, sports, passion and so on. How the Screening habit play the role in our lifestyle is the topic we will discuss.
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 Watching
video
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 doesn't restrict based on the
children
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. Nowadays, it starts from
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newborn
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new born
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 till the person on
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death bed
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. Even though, the habit
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 major part of all
are
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 activities, especially in
internet
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the internet
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 era anything and everything we can learn from the media. On the bright sight,
children
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 use a TV set for their studies, gaining knowledge, and social awareness.
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 there are dedicated
channel
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channels
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learn
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 dance, cooking, history, animal, plants even about our earth and galaxy. Sitting in one place can travel around the world, and know the different communities, countries and
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culture. It gives us a big bunch of knowledge. Even it gives in-depth on sports. Now let's throw some light on the negative side of it. It
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 major space
of
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 our life span. Due to the involvement
on
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it
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 kids don't realize the term spent and what all they miss in the real world experience. Because of the involvement in
it
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children
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 are not even spending generation with the family and their passion. The idiot Box captures the minds the way they are curious about upcoming action on the program. In that
way
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 they started to live in an imaginary world rather than the
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.
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 cartoon
channel
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 and animation movies I had
experience
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 my
children
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talk
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 and
act
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 like the characters of the cartoon even though they are 7 and 3. According to
me
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 the TV set takes an important part of my life, it's in our
hand
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 how to handle and control
they
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 involvement of our
children
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towards
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 TV set screening.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • engaging
  • linguistic skills
  • exposure
  • inappropriate content
  • distort
  • optimizing
  • debate
  • implications
  • viewing habits
  • parental guidance
  • educational programs
  • screen time
  • stereotypes
  • unhealthy behaviors
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