School teachers are more responsible for social and intellectual development of students than parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree? what is your opinion.

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in the improvement of social and intellectual rather than
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will explain
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of reasons why educational institutions are responsible for
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development.
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their own capabilities which
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is only know
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by school
teachers
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role to teach skills like sociable in society other than
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instance,
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influence from other friends to learn things.
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children
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about intellectual development depends on
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social and intellectual development because
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many
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due to less ability than other students. Which can lead to undeveloped students so
parents
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teachers
parents
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future and every individual day take
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time for
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and make them success In conclusion, as far as
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concerned
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, both
teachers
and
parents
are equally important to teach students skills.
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, schools have major responsibility
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parents
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life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nuances
  • responsibility
  • intellectual development
  • social development
  • structured learning environment
  • curriculum
  • diverse interactions
  • group activities
  • conflict resolution
  • foundational impact
  • core values
  • beliefs
  • attitudes
  • nurturing
  • joint responsibility
  • collaboration
  • continuous dialogue
  • distinct roles
  • underestimate
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