Modern technology such as personal computers and the internets have made it possible for many people to do their work from home at least part of their work instead of going to an office everyday. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of this situation.

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recent years, the development of technology has increased drastically and it
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people's life, like finishing their jobs
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their
home
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using private computers and
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internets
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instead
of going to the
office
everyday
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.
This
situation could give some advantages and disadvantages at some points. I will present both parts in the essay below. Working from
home
has been applied at some companies since the pandemic of covid19 in 2020. It is true that recent technology ease employees to complete their work everywhere and anytime.
for example
, a worker could not go to his
office
because of
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event.
Then
, that employee just made an excuse to his superior not to come to the
office
.
This
condition
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the company because his
job
could not be done on time. But nowadays, by working online, he could finish his
job
from his
home
after the family event and the company still can run like usual.
On the other hand
, working from
home
also
could give negative impacts. if all the workers are permitted to complete their
job
outside the
office
,
then
the
office
will become
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. It would not be good if there is a guest or any business relative come to the
office
but there are only
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of them present.
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disadvantage of
this
situation is the social life of the employees. They
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the task alone in their
home
and never meet their
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colleagues
collegues
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colleagues
face to face. In conclusion, working from
home
does make
people
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life easier because they could finish their
job
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everywhere. But it
also
confine
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them to socialise with other people
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their
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colleagues
collegues
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colleagues
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexible working hours
  • increased productivity
  • commute time
  • work-life balance
  • financial savings
  • global talent pool
  • geographic constraints
  • isolation
  • social interaction
  • separating work from personal life
  • communication and collaboration
  • face-to-face interactions
  • misunderstandings
  • team members
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