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some organisations believe that their employeea shuld dress smartly. Other value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

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trend of dressing over the efficiency of work in organizations become a debatable issue .
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 of organizations. To start with, a professional dressing code shows consistency among all employees , as it irradiates the chances of discrimination faced by workers on the basis of their cloth choice and aids in improving their self-esteem.
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, there are marketing levels jobs where personnel have to impress their clients by focusing on their personality.
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. It is easily understandable by example that during the covid period majority of companies choose working from home by giving more importance to worker health and studies shows that
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