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In many countries, few younger generation is attending for musical concerts and theaters physically. Why ? Should we encourage to attend more ?

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Introduction
Most of
the
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nations, Physical participation has been reduced in musical
events
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 and cinemas
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among
amoung
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among
 the youth. There are various factors behind
this
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 as resources and availability of certain
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 to why
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 needed to encourage our younger
generation
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 to participate more physically.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, during the past decade, most
of
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people
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the people
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 didn'
t
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 have access to watch
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 programs . So eventually those
people
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 have to attend physically
such
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events
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. With the technology development, there are many flat-form to see
these kind
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these kinds
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 of
events
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for example
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 YouTube,
Nefilix
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Netflix
, Spotify etc. So they can
can
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get experience without participating
those
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events
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.
In addition
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 to that, most
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youth
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 career development rather than attend these
events
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. So
that
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those
people
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 couldn'
t
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be allocated
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allocated
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 their
time
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 to attend
such
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 shows.
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,
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world
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 biggest festival is Tomorrowland which
conducted
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 once a year in
certain
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 location. Some of the younger
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generation
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 couldn'
t
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 travel or allocated their
time
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.
As a result
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 those
people
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 who wish to watch
on-line
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online
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,
people
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 who wish to watch
such
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 shows,eventually select the most preferable way because of resources and
time
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 allocation without attending physically.
Body paragraph 2
In
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 the other hand, Considering the reasons
affect
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that affect
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to
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the participation
of
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 shows, it is needed to encourage them to attend physically.
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, when we
at
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are at
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 a live program, we can feel the vibe.
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Also
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 there won'
t
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 be any distractions during the shows and enjoy it while watching
such
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events
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. So It would be beneficial for those who like to mind relax. Even though there are online flat-form to watch these live
musical
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musicals
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, they need to increase the amount of pay.So eventually younger
generation
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 who do not like to spend extra money on it will participate physically.
Conclusion
In conclusion, it is undeniable fact that the younger
generation
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 is not influenced to gather musical
events
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 and
theaters
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theatres
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in
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physically due to the resources and availability of
time
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.
However
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, I believe that
people
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 should
encouraged
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be encouraged
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 to attend these
events
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 physically to get
best
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the best
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 experience.

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