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Wealthy countries should accept more refuge and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The picture illustrates the changes in a public
park
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 from 1920 to the present time. As is shown clearly in the diagram, it can be seen that there have been ten significant changes made to the grange
park
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, and the most noticeable one relates to the construction of the water feature. Looking at the plan in detail, originally, there was a stage for musicians,
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, an amphitheatre for concerts has been built at the present time. The fountain in the middle of the
park
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 has disappeared and in its place are a rose garden and seats, the rose gardens which were located in the northeast and southwest corners
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 been demolished and the seats in 1920 were relocated.
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, the two entrances to the
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 remain unchanged. On the east side of the
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, a café stands
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 to the north entrance, and to its east is a children’s play area, which used to be the place for
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a pond
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pond
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 for water plants. The glasshouse near the south gate was removed, and we can see a new water feature.
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, the entrance to the new underground car
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 is situated in the
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south east
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southeast
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 corner of the
park
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Humanitarian obligation
  • Financial resources
  • Infrastructure
  • Labor shortages
  • Essential services
  • International human rights conventions
  • Social cohesion
  • Cultural diversity
  • Public services
  • Inclusive practices
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