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Wealthy countries should accept more refuge and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The picture illustrates the changes in a public
park
 from 1920 to the present time. As is shown clearly in the diagram, it can be seen that there have been ten significant changes made to the grange
park
, and the most noticeable one relates to the construction of the water feature. Looking at the plan in detail, originally, there was a stage for musicians,
however
, an amphitheatre for concerts has been built at the present time. The fountain in the middle of the
park
 has disappeared and in its place are a rose garden and seats, the rose gardens which were located in the northeast and southwest corners
has
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 been demolished and the seats in 1920 were relocated.
By contrast
, the two entrances to the
park
 remain unchanged. On the east side of the
park
, a café stands
next
 to the north entrance, and to its east is a children’s play area, which used to be the place for
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a pond
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pond
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 for water plants. The glasshouse near the south gate was removed, and we can see a new water feature.
Finally
, the entrance to the new underground car
park
 is situated in the
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south-east
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south east
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southeast
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 corner of the
park
.
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