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You experienced an incident on public transport that caused you distress. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company. In your letter ▪ describe the incident ▪ explain how this incident affected you ▪ suggest what could be done about it

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to complain about an incident which
was
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occurred
on
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last
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 Friday morning in one of your public transportation vehicles. I was travelling in your
bus
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 from Koswatta to Fort for an interview.
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,
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 I got
in to
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 the
bus
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 with adequate time for the interview, it was delayed to reach
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the destination which stressed me a little.
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, I rushed to the door and rang the bell to get down from the
bus
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. The
bus
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 was not stopped though I rang the bell
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a few times and it was
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stuck
stucked
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stuck
 in a traffic light which only enabled me to get down.
This
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 experience made my entire day a mess whereas I could not attend
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the meeting on time which ruined my
first
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 impression in front of the panel.
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 to that, I was
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embarrassed
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embarrassed
 in front of the passengers since the conductor was not listening to me. I request you to take immediate
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 against the conductor and the driver which will assure that it will not be repeated in the future. I am expecting
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a prompt response from your end to resolve the highlighted concern. Yours Faithfully, Thuya Perera
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