Some people believe that companies should manufacture products that last for a long time. Others feel that the emphasis should be placed on producing goods that are cheap. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is believed by some individuals that manufacturers should produce good
quality
products
that are durable, whereas some
people
prefer that
companies
should focus on manufacturing goods that are inexpensive and affordable. In my
opinion
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companies
should produce good
quality
products
at low
prices
so
it
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can be used by all the classes of our society. On one hand, some
people
suggest that
companies
should focus on producing
high
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high-quality
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quality
products
so that customers could use
it
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them
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for a longer time which will benefit the pockets of
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the consumer
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consumer
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consumers
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as they don't need to spend money again and again to buy the same commodity.
Additionally
, superior
quality
products
are low maintenance so
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it
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pocket friendly.
However
,
as
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the big brands who are manufacturing good
quality
products
have created their monopoly in the market and they charge
huge
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a huge
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amount
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amounts
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for their reliable
products
.
For example
, apple phones are super durable
water
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with water
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resistance with good pixel and camera
quality
but very expensive that it is not affordable
by
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middle class
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middle-class
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people
.
On the contrary
, some folks consider that the focus should be on manufacturing goods at affordable
prices
so that all
the
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classes of society should be able to purchase and make use of the
products
.
The
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big percentage of
population
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the population
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in the country is either middle class or poor class
people
and buying costly
products
is not at all feasible for them.
Therefore
, if brands could reduce the
price
of
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the product
a product
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product
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products
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it would become a boon for the
people
living in poverty.
For example
,China
companies
like Xiaomi,
Realme
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and Realme
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manufactures
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manufacture
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same
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the same
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smartphones
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smart phones
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smartphones
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at an extremely cheaper
price
compared to
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iPhone
iphone
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the iphone
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so that almost all
people
can buy and use
it
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them
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. In my opinion, if
companies
will produce good
quality
products
at
cheap
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a cheap
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price
it would increase the business as because of its affordable
price
all the classes of our society would
be purchase
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it resulting in
increase
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an increase
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of demand of the product which will eventually increase the sale and company's profit and revenue will reach heights. I believe
companies
spend a huge amount on marketing and advertisements by reducing that it is feasible lower the
prices
of commodities.
For example
, Reliance trends
also
known as Ajio in India is selling
best
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quality
clothes at cheaper
prices
which is attracting all the
people
to buy from them.
Thus
, by reducing the
prices
of
products
profit margin will get reduced but at the same time sale will increase which will be a win-win situation for
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the consumer
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consumer
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consumers
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as
he
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they
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can buy
products
at
affordable
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an affordable
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price
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prices
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and for the
companies
because
there
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products
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products'
product's
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demand will be increased.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • disposable goods
  • economic benefits
  • frequent replacements
  • technological adaptation
  • manufacturing affordability
  • environmental responsibility
  • longevity
  • minimize costs
  • wider society
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