Nowadays a lot of young people use social media. do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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the demerits preponderate over merits . In
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trend with relevant ideas and examples On the one hand, there are two main reasons for using social
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and foremost, teenagers are updating themselves by spending
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because, an application like Twitter provides plenty of information regarding education, current affairs and news in a flash of seconds people are able to know.
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Ukraine by the Russian government got news through social
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Secondly
, youth are able to show their talent on social
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easily by putting their opinion on Twitter about
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trending topics and showing dances skills by making reels with updated songs
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, there are a few drawbacks as well. Mainly younger generation is spending so much
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unable to concentrate on their studies.
Furthermore
, many celebrities upload videos of drinking alcohol and inhaling drugs by the nose which becomes fashion in today's world. So, youth are given much priority and follow them blindly
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chances to them get addicted to drugs In conclusion, as far as
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am concerned there are a few benefits like updating themselves
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the news and related to education but, a few negative results consuming more
time
on social
media
. It depends on children how they utilise applications
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global connectivity
  • Knowledge sharing
  • Social engagement
  • Digital marketing
  • Networking opportunities
  • Cybersecurity
  • Online privacy
  • Digital literacy
  • Social awareness
  • Echo chamber effect
  • Information overload
  • Digital footprint
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