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Online education is becoming increasingly popular. Many university students are choosing to study online instead of face to face. Do the advantages of distance education outweigh disadvantages?

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Every student dreams of getting a world-class
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 from a renowned institute
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 and choosing a major or an institute is a daunting decision that they make in their lives. It is not always possible to visit a different country or state for higher
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 and
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, many are opting for distant
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 these days. In
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 it is a matter of choice and individuals should weigh both positives and negatives depending on their circumstances, it is best to have offline
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 who prefer
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 mode of
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, so so probably because of two reasons.
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education
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 is far less expensive and affordable for many than
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offline
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. Certainly, if a student,
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, is studying abroad and has to visit their homeland after every 6 months
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 they have to bear the
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air travel
 cost.
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, they have to bear accommodation, food and other living costs. Another reason for choosing
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 mode of study is homesickness, which is a major
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 for many individuals. They prefer to stay with their families and wish to get a degree from their dream institute as well,
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, the best option for them is
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 in an online course at a university of their choice. There are,
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, a few disadvantages of
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 mode of study as well.
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 of all, college life doesn't come back. It is probably once or twice in your
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 that you get to experience it, and I believe,
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 reason why some do not let go of the opportunity to be physically present at the college/university
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 they are studying. It is
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 beneficial in other ways as well: able to work with peers, getting hands-on experience, learning co-operation and other
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 as well as social skills. Another
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 perhaps related
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disadvantage
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the disadvantage
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 would be,
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 to get in-person knowledge from teachers and lecturers. Undoubtedly, teachers are able to share
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students
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 are physically present. In conclusion,
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 it is understandable
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why
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 are increasingly opting for online
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, in my opinion, it is better to experience college life.
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, if the
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students'
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 circumstances do not allow
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 study offline, they should go for
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education
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distance learning
  • E-learning platforms
  • Virtual classrooms
  • Traditional education
  • Digital resources
  • Self-paced learning
  • Asynchronous learning
  • Blended learning
  • Technological infrastructure
  • Student engagement
  • Time management
  • Cost-effective
  • Geographical barriers
  • Networking opportunities
  • Face-to-face interaction
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