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Modern technology now allows rapid and uncontrolled access to and exchange of information.Far from being beneficial,this is danger to societies.To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Introduction
Nowadays, in order to communicate better,
people
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 prefer to use universal
languages
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 rather than learn
minority
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languages
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 which are in danger. Some
people
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 think that governments should take
actions
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action
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 to save these
languages
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. I agree with it.
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When it comes to
downsides
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the downsides
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 of protecting
minority
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languages
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, at
first
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., local
government
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governments
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 have to invest a considerable amount of money.
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, to teach locals about their native
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, governments need to build bilingual schools and purchase educational
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resources
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. For one region, nations usually invest millions of dollars. If there are dozens of linguistic minorities in one country
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 as China, billions of dollars will be invested. Overall, the funding really
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 countries’ financial burden. On top of that, because some areas are distant, there are some issues in supervision. On one hand,
people
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 lack the awareness of protecting
minority
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languages
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. They emphasize its literature and downplay its use.
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, some findings reveal that needy regions use the funding as
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 extra source of living.
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,
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the upsides
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upsides
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upside
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 of saving
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extinct
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is
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 protecting cultures which belong to linguistic minorities.
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 is because it is necessary to handle
local
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the local
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language
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,
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 when the public
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 to explore their culture. If a certain
language
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have
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 been
extincted
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extinct
, its region’s history will be forgotten. On top of that, governments protect
minority
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languages
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 means that
language
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minorities ‘s
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 foundation rights are defended. It makes sure that they have
linguistic
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the linguistic
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right
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rights
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 as equality as
language
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 majorities.
Conclusion
In conclusion, some
people
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 believe that government will have heavily financial stress,
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, some distant areas might not be monitored well.
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, I believe that guarding these
languages
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 is worthwhile because it
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 these regions’ cultures and
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 them
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equal status.

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