Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes, and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decision about matter that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

A number of individuals think that permitting
children
to make their own choices on daily basis (
for example
food, attire, and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of people who only think about their own wishes.
However
, some have
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opinion
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because it is crucial for
children
to make decisions about matters that affect them.
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the contradicting views regarding the freedom of
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and how it will boost
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management
skill
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. It is commonly true that if
parents
easily
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youngsters to have
freedom
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to follow their desire without control and checking can lead them in becoming selfish grownups. They will believe that
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the
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have the authority in every single
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because there
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no
one
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stop their wishes.
For example
,
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spoiled
children
will have a tantrum if their friends do not agree with them.
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because the
parents
always spoil them and
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lack of understanding that the world does not
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around them only.
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contradict, due to
this
style, if the
parents
guide them right, the
children
will understand that they can
also
have
their
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control over something but it will affect not only
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their self
herself
theirself
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but their
surrounding
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.
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will encourage them in trying to be more responsible
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every single day
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because the actions taken
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themself will force them to select which
one
is the best and which
one
is the worst so they know what to choose. It will uplift their critical thinking skills too. In conclusion, allowing your
children
to pick what they want to do, what clothes they decide to wear, what food they want to eat, and other decisions
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a great style of teaching.
This
will teach them
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about
every action they choose will have consequences and they are the
one
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who
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responsibility
over
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it
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. Of
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parents
should give their guidance
first
for them not completely hands-off in giving the freedom
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the youngster.
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