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In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units rather than in large family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

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For many benefits, some individuals prefer to live independently or in one-generation families rather than multiple-generation families in the modern era. I believe both have advantages. In
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 pertinent topic. Living alone,
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 can live the way they want without any difference in lifestyle and living perspectives, as well as conflicts due to generation distance. In the modern world,
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, especially young adults, have open views on life, and these views are different from the points of view of their parents.
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, when living alone or getting married to someone of the same age,
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 can learn and work in the ways they believe are suitable for them.
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, everyone can live comfortably. Currently, youngsters choose to study higher in overseas countries to get more experience and be independent.
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, not living
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with the family can avoid arguments caused by generational differences, and everyone would have a better and more harmonious relationship.
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, living in large family groups supports
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 and mentality
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 each member. Savings for living costs could be possible when
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 live with their parents,
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 not wasting money
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 a new house, which is overpriced in big cities.
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 can use that cost to develop themselves and invest in their families and children.
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, individuals could take care of their parents, who are really easy to feel isolated from, especially with regard to mental health. In a pressurized society, living together as a family,
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 could take care of each other’s mental health. In conclusion, there are lots of advantages to both living alone and being part of a nuclear family or traditional extended family group. It depends on how individuals feel, so it's hard to say whether it's negative or not.
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