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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss views and give your own opinion.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
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 economic cycle in any
country
.some people assume that
experts
 should be obligated to
work
 where they
trained
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, while others feel they have the right to choose any
country
 they want to
work
.
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 I agree with the
second
 group that believes in freedom. On the one hand, many people claim that
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professionals
proffesionals
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professionals
 should be working where they earned their degrees. The reason might be that specialists have
responsibility
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 toward
community
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the community
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 due to
their
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 educational conditions that the government provided to them,
therefore
, it is logical that
experts
 should stay in the same
country
that
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where
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 they
educated
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were educated
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 and expand their skills
to
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in
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the
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apply
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society in order to make payback. For
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instance
intance
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instance
, a doctor who
get
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gets
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high quality
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high-quality
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 education in a top university and from
government
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the government
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,
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 should help the citizens in order to compensate for the authority.
On the other hand
, I along with people who think that there should not be a force on professionals for choosing their workplace. imposing
this
 rule can lead to
deterioration
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the deterioration
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 of mental health. To elaborate, when they immigrate to another
country
, they will
aquire
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acquire
require
 more knowledge and
also
 they will
motivate
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 to
work
 more accurately,
in addition
 to the reason, they
also
 can spread their knowledge and experiences to
another places
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another place
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.
For example
, when a doctor has
a
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 ideal life in their wish city, they feel incentive, so they
work
 more efficiently. In conclusion,
although
 the
first
 group has
justifable
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justifiable
reason
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reasons
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 and they believe
experts
 have
responsible
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 to make
payback
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a payback
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, I believe
experts
 need a life with mental health and the right to
sharing
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share
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 expertise in any place they wish for.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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