In many countries today, major cities have become too big and overcrowded. Why is this? What measures could be taken to reduce this problem?

In a lot of Nations nowadays, major
cities
have
became
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too big and overcrowded. There are ample
of
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reasons behind it and
also
, plenty of solutions for reducing
this
problem which will be discussed in
further
paragraphs. The biggest cause behind it
that
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, there are ample
of
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facilities
available in
cities
. In
this
day and age, more and more individuals go to major
cities
who
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live in rural
areas
because, in rural
areas
, there are
not
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better
amenities
for them.
Then
, they go
in
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big
cities
where, they study and
also
,
they
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obtain
good
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job
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. They earn a lot of
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because, they prefer to live
better
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life and
also
, they want to
fulfill
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their fundamental necessities. With
this
,
population
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the population
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has risen in major
cities
.
For instance
, a notable size of
population
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the population
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go
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to Chandigarh which is
major
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city because, in
this
place,
education
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system is excellent and
also
,
more
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more
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job opportunities which are fruitful for them.
Hence
, big
cities
become too big and overcrowded. The easiest solution is that
,
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authorities should provide
amenities
in rural
areas
. As
i
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forementioned
that
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, ample
of
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masses go
in
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big
cities
because
in
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,in
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rural
areas
, there are no outstanding
facilities
. If
government
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the government
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will provide
amenities
for groups of
population
in these
areas
.
Then
, they have
good
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education and
then
, they will obtain
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a well
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well paid
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job
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.
Then
, they can
fulfill
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their basic necessities. With
this
, they will not go
in
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big
cities
.
For example
, in Punjab, more and more individuals prefer to live in their villages because,
administration
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provide
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provides
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better
facilities
such
as
,
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better
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education system,
well paid
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jobs and other
amenities
which are useful for
masses
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the masses
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.
Therefore
,
regime
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should provide
amenities
for groups of
population
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the population
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in rural
areas
. To recapitulate,
in
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present time,
cities
become too big and overcrowded because, there are ample
of
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facilities
available in
cities
.
however
, the panaceas is that,
government
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the government
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should provide
facilities
for individuals in rural
areas
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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