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In many countries today, major cities have become too big and overcrowded. Why is this? What measures could be taken to reduce this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays major cities turned into overcrowded areas, as the development increase all the near suburbs become part of the city,
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 what steps could we take to solve
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 I will look at the reasons and preventions that we can reduce it. As far as I concern,
causes
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 of
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 problem
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 varied,
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,
growing
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 business of a country would take part
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 industries, construction companies, new restaurants and so on, they will need labour.
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 there is a restaurant located our village which all his staff came from
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country side
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, the owner held them an intensive training of all the basic needs
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 as cooking, reading and writing.
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 after they settled down they
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 brought their families.
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 another important factor which
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 urban
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.
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 many fathers are city workers,
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 they see every morning children who are going to
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school, after that they bring their children in
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order
oder
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order
 to learn something as the others do. From my point of view,
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 would say
overpopulation
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the overpopulation
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 solution could be good governance for the utilization of the land and residences with a clear
strategy
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 plans to
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avoid
aviod
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avoid
 crowding in one area and spreading people at the sides of the town. In conclusion,
growth
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 of the community in
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certain places
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a
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different
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consequences
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concequences
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consequences
. thought, it is advantages are way more positive.
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