Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about the dangers of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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Teaching student about the danger of criminal

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by creating a conversation with offenders is one of the major topics in

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modern society. While there are a few reasons why

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education by ex-criminals is true, there are more reasonable grounds that

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can be taught in alternative ways. There are might be

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certain reasons that

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illegal

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because taking a conversation with a wrongdoer may gain awareness about the

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, children have a chance to avoid devil

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around their life. If

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, they will not

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. Another reason is that if they are communicating with ex-criminals, they will know exactly what price

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offenders pay for doing bad

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is how prisoners have fallen into a dilemma.

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, there is stronger evidence that a combination of different education will create an advantageous result compared to a former prisoner. One reason is that parents should raise their children’s awareness when they were at an early age by

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them how to avoid

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toxic social network and evil

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watch national news which is on television.

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a staggering rate.

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, teachers should add more courses to students about how to take care of themselves from devil

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communicate

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with offenders about

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of committing

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illegality is true in a few aspects, there are more compelling reasons that taking

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alternative

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to teach students about the danger of

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is better than talking with a former prisoner. It is recommended that we should make a better education method

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of having a conversation with a wrongdoer.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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