The role of prisons should be to punish criminals who have committed serious crimes. Training courses and education offered to prisoners are a waste of taxpayers' money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Across the world,
people
who commit criminal activities were kept in jails to prevent them from committing another mistake and at the same time to change their behaviour by providing education or by training them for self-earning when they came out of prison. Few
people
may think it is wasting of
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money but I will disagree
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opinion and will explain my views in the following paragraphs.
First
of all,
people
will not commit any criminal activities if they have sufficient lively hood income and enough food for their family, but in some cases due to their family history or due to frustration
people
used to commit
this
kind of criminal activities. There may many reasons for their frustrations, they didn't get a proper job for their education even though they work hard or few
people
may not able to study to acquire good jobs like others. Due to
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psychological
fallings
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people
may fall into wrong hands and tend to do
this
kind of activity and that leads them to jail.
Second
of all, By birth all humans are having the same kind of mental behaviours, it is the situation that changes their attitude. When the court gave punishment to any prisoner, the motive behind any punishment is to change them and kept in the right path so that they can mingle in
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society like others. To make
this
happen, govt
needs
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to spend some amount on them to re-skill or to educate them. Once they succeed and are released from prison they will those skills to start a business or get new jobs that will give money, in that way they
also
become taxpayers like others. To conclude
this
, I would say few
people
commit mistakes to
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their lives and few
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may do mistakes due to their psychological
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. I totally agree with the statement by upskilling these
people
with gove money we can put them on the right path and we can make them taxable payers once they release from jail.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recidivism
  • reoffending
  • reintegration
  • cost-effective
  • rehabilitation
  • incarceration
  • taxpayers' money
  • recidivism rates
  • vocational training
  • ethical considerations
  • second chances
  • societal reintegration
  • crime deterrence
  • penal system
  • correctional education
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