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Essay topics: In many countries, children are getting fatter and less fit day by day. Why is it so and suggest solutions.

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In recent times, kids are spending more time playing video
games
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 consuming a great number of
junk
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food
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 which affects their health and make them fat. In
this
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 essay, I will talk about some serious problems and provide relevant solutions to tackle these issues. The major problem of obesity in
children
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 is their bad eating habits,
junk
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food
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 is becoming more and more popular around the world and the majority of kids are eating
junk
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 foods
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 of home-cooked meals.
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, the other reason for
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 issue is lack of physical activity, video
games
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 are becoming very popular these days, and some game companies hire some Youtube influencers to market their
games
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,
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,
children
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 watch those YouTubers and get influenced to play video
games
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.
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, they ignore playing outdoor
games
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 like cricket and football which help them to become more fit. The solutions for these problems are, that parents should spend more time with their little ones and motivate them to eat more healthy and home-cooked meals,
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 of fast
food
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,
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,
junk
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food
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 companies should
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 raise their prices to control their bad eating habits.
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, schools should take sports as seriously as compared to Math and Science and should start some weekly play programs for the students, which may involve some famous sports personalities to share their experiences and spread the importance of sports among the
children
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. To conclude, bad eating habits and lack of physical activity in
children
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 is a serious concern and not only parents but
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 school authorities should start some play programs to motivate offspring to eat healthily and play outdoor
games
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.
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