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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

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In some nations, increasing numbers of folks gradually have interest in searching about the
property
history
 where they dwell in. As far as I am concerned, there are many reasons
about
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this
 trend. In
this
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that
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 reasons and how
public
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the public
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 can find
this
information
 which is associated with
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the property
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property
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property's
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 past
history
.
Firstly
, I think that
most
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 important reason is a health issue which leads to
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a critical
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problem
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problems
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.
For example
,if the
property
 is over the
trash-storage
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 in the past, soil and water
was
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 polluted by the trash. So
quality
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 of life will be diminished significantly. In
this
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 conditions,
public
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 can not drink water because it contains harmful materials and elements which lead to severe health
problem
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.
Secondly
, Another reason is that
public
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the public
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 can know their
property
 in historical aspects,
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, there are apartments
locating
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 near the Gyeongbok palace , it was the old houses with
muds
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mud
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 and grasses in
1400s
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. Throughout the
seraching
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searching
history
 of their architecture, folks can know about their origin and
history
 which lead them to preserve their culture.
Also
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 it leads them to think importantly about the
architectures
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architecture
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.
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Nowaday
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,
public
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the public
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 can find easily
the
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information
 about their
architetures
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architecture
architectures
in
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 the internet, For
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example
exmaple
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, throughout a Google
searching
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,
public
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the public
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 can find any
information
 about
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their
thier
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their
architetures
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architectures
architecture
. The
information
contain
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 not only
an
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ownership
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 but
also
 additional
property
 details. Even more, professional
property
resaerching
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researching
 sites like
Propertyshark
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PropertyShark
,
public
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 can obtain more detailed
information
. In my opinion, I guess
this
 trend become
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strengthened
strenghtened
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strengthened
 gradually in the future.
Therefore
,
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governments
government
goverments
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governments
 in many nations might should invest
the
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 industry associated with
property
history
 searching
by
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future
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.
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