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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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Advancement in technology has completely changed individuals' perception of viewing life.
However
, the
Internet
 has improved access to unlimited
information
. In my view, though
this
 trend is advantageous,has more disadvantages.
This
 essay not only discusses its cons but
also
 its pros. On the one hand,
to begin
 with,positives include,
initially
, individuals can stay updated with the worldwide news.
For example
, if we browse for any sort of
information
, within no time we can avail of it and can become aware of the same.
secondly
, these days it has become effortless to get familiar with job descriptions, which is beneficial.
For instance
, we do not have to travel door to door to find employment, rather just by surfing the
,
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 we can apply for the same.
Moreover
, even buying something follows the same pattern.
Lastly
, these are useful reliabilities on the
internet
.
On the other hand
, drawbacks are,
firstly
, people can get unnecessary
information
, which may influence their mental health.
For example
, on social media, trolling has become a trend among youngsters.
This
 kind of social bullying may impact people extremely, as a consequence, few may commit suicide.
Secondly
, the
information
 about crimes may be provoking to some individuals, to commit the same. To exemplify, I came across a piece of news, about a kidnap mystery , in which the accused took reference from YouTube not only to perform the activity but
also
 how to defend themselves if caught. To conclude, I believe
this
 phenomenon has more negatives like trolling and unnecessarily detailed reference videos, rather its positives
such
 as updated
information
 as well as easy access to jobs.
This
 can be tackled by limiting the usage of the
Internet
.
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