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modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced amount of time people spend seeing their friends this has had a negative effect on their social lives. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days communication forms changed and
people
 don’t use past forms of communication. New
ways
 to contact
people
 have a variety
such
 as using email, messages, social
networks
, etc. These forms have many positive aspects but we would like to analyze the negative aspects because one of the most important problems in
this
 field is the decreased
time
people
 spend together and it’s worrying. When
people
 use social
networks
 and virtual space too much, they spend less
time
 together and less seeing each other which might decrease their social abilities or other hand they lose their ability to contact and communicate with
people
 well as the past, and over
time
 makes them more alone.
Also
, when humans have fewer physical meetings, they can’t understand each other so well and maybe many misunderstandings happen. They couldn’t see their other side or partner's reaction and couldn’t understand what he/she felt. These misunderstandings cause many misgivings and may destroy relationships or partnerships.
In other words
, when
people
 are enthusiastic about using new
ways
 to contact others only, they can’t perceive humans and indeed lose them and their connection. In fact, if
this
 way is published and
people
 lose their connection society in the general sense will be destroyed, and only virtual space and social
networks
 stay. In conclusion, I agree with using new communication
ways
 but there should be laws and
people
 should be in the middle of using new and past
ways
 and try to don’t overuse social
networks
thus
 they have to spend
time
 with their friends, family, and other
people
 for the society survive.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern forms of communication
  • email
  • messaging
  • reduce
  • amount of time
  • see friends
  • social lives
  • technology
  • communication
  • faster
  • convenient
  • stay in touch
  • connect
  • online
  • social media platforms
  • meet new people
  • face-to-face interactions
  • maintain relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • social isolation
  • digital communication
  • emotional depth
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