Some people thnk that men and ươmen have different qualities, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Whether
men
and
women
should have specific
jobs
which suitable for them because of different qualities they have or not is a controversial discussion.
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that
both
men
and
women
coud
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could
train themself to suit the
job
no matter
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their intelligence
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or physical barrier and teamwork between
both
sexes would be more effective because of their unique characteristic,
while
some individuals think that
men
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muscle better
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than
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women's
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while
women
are more crafty so they should do certain
jobs
. A considerable point is that body
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be removed
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training. Since there are many methods to improve strength or flexibility
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women
coulf
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could
also
become stronger and bigger
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to suit
their
job
whereas
men
could learn how to be crafty,
both
of them could study at the same level as there is no limit for each gender.
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the USA, where there are many powerful
women
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up
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job
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jobs
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which used to belong only to
men
like
worker
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workers
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,
politican
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politician
or
engineer
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engineers
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and
female
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females
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contribute about 27% of these
jobs
. Others opinion that each gender
have
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their
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its
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pwn
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characteristic so they should have
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job related
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only related to that gender.
This
is a
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valuable
;le point but with different
chracteristics
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characteristics
, a team with
both
sexes would generate more ideas and as they work together, they could learn from each other to complete themself. In conclusion, male and female could do each other
jobs
or work together perfectly as they could improve themself
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training.
Although
they have
differnt
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different
traits to suit certain
jobs
, they could support each other by using
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in some stages of the
job
.

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