People have to spend more and more time to travel from their homes for jobs and study. What are the reasons ? How can we solve this problem?

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Education
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and employment are both
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indispensable part of humankind, without
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individual's life
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not prosper. Despite
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,
people
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have to spend quality time
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from their residents to reach
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schools and workplaces.
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essay will examine the reasons for
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problem before suggesting some possible solutions. The most prominent reason
people
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have to
travel
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long distances is
lack
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the lack
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of good schools and companies in order to provide quality
education
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and higher wages. Many institutes imposed heavy fees
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the students, but they have
poor
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a poor
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education
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system
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as a result
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, one has to migrate long distances to acquire
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education
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.
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, many multinational companies are located in urban areas which forced the rural employees to
travel
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far away from their homes.
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, it
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high
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a high
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cost of commute which is the major drawback for them.
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, In many developing countries like India where
people
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tend to have higher
travel
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expenses compares to the standard of living. The solutions are not simple.
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with,
government
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the government
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should build more schools in
countryside
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the countryside
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to eliminate the commuting prices.
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, parents will be less worried about their child
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facing any obstacles.
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, transportation authorities should develop more public transit
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at
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every
places
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whether it is in the
villag
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village
,
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so that
individual
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individuals
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can
travel
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with ease. Take an example of a country
Japan
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in Japan
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, where local
authority
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authorities
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introduce metro trains for
public
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the public
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which is both cheap and safe. It
consume
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very less time to reach
destination
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the destination
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as a result
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. In conclusion, in
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contemporary
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people
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have to spend more time
in
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commuting because of
lack
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the lack
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of proper transportation services. It can only solve by
authority
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the authority
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to circumvent the situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban sprawl
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • property prices
  • commute
  • public transport
  • traffic congestion
  • peak hours
  • centralization
  • urbanized areas
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