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People have to spend more and more time to travel from their homes for jobs and study. What are the reasons ? How can we solve this problem?

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Education
 and employment are both
an
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indispensable part of humankind, without
this
 individual's life
do
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does
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 not prosper. Despite
this
,
people
 have to spend quality time
to commute
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commuting
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 from their residents to reach
at
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schools and workplaces.
This
 essay will examine the reasons for
this
 problem before suggesting some possible solutions. The most prominent reason
people
 have to
travel
 long distances is
lack
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the lack
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 of good schools and companies in order to provide quality
education
 and higher wages. Many institutes imposed heavy fees
from
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 the students, but they have
poor
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a poor
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education
system
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systems
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as a result
, one has to migrate long distances to acquire
best
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education
.
Secondly
, many multinational companies are located in urban areas which forced the rural employees to
travel
 far away from their homes.
Consequently
, it
consume
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high
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a high
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 cost of commute which is the major drawback for them.
For instance
, In many developing countries like India where
people
 tend to have higher
travel
 expenses compares to the standard of living. The solutions are not simple.
To begin
 with,
government
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the government
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 should build more schools in
countryside
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the countryside
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 to eliminate the commuting prices.
Also
, parents will be less worried about their child
from
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facing any obstacles.
Secondly
, transportation authorities should develop more public transit
system
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systems
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at
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in
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 every
places
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place
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 whether it is in the
villag
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village
,
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 so that
individual
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individuals
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 can
travel
 with ease. Take an example of a country
Japan
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in Japan
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, where local
authority
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authorities
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 introduce metro trains for
public
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the public
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 which is both cheap and safe. It
consume
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consumes
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 very less time to reach
destination
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the destination
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as a result
. In conclusion, in
this
 contemporary
world
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,world
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people
 have to spend more time
in
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commuting because of
lack
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the lack
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 of proper transportation services. It can only solve by
authority
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the authority
an authority
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 to circumvent the situation.
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