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The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I totally agree that using other options for non-renewable
fuels
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 must take precedence in today’s
world
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.
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, exploring and developing renewable
energy
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sources
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 reduces environmental damage because sustainable
energy
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sources
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 promote the perpetuity of ecosystems. The detrimental effects of fossil
energy
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 are evident and using them continuously is catastrophic. If environmentally friendly renewable
energy
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 resources like wind and solar are used
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 fossil
fuels
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 like coal and oil will be obsolete. Clearly, current non-renewable
energy
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sources
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 are harmful to both the environment and the inhabitants of the
world
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. In the case of offshore oil drilling, environmentalists argue that it is harmful to the ecosystem. As
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, focusing on developing safe alternative
energy
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sources
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 means that ‘clean’
energy
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 will be produced thereby significantly improving the sustainability of ecosystems and the environment. By exploring and developing other forms of
energy
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, future generations will not suffer from diseases that are directly linked to the effects of fossil
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fuels
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fuel
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 usage.
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, skin cancer is thought to be caused by harmful ultra-violet rays from the sun, which is a
consequent
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 of a damaged ozone layer. A recent study shows that the burning of coal and deforestation owing to coal mining damages the ozone layer, leading to diseases
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 as cancer. Preserving forests like the Amazon and developing more wind farms as a source of clean
energy
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 prevents diseases from harming people and slows the rate of extinction for animals. In conclusion, nowadays, more than ever, as the
world
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 demands more
energy
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, cleaner
sources
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 of
energy
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 must be prioritised over everything else. These should be renewable and not harmful to the
world
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 and its inhabitants. As long as fossil
fuels
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 are used, there will be harmful consequences.
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, safer
energy
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 alternatives are the only way to save the
world
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • safe alternatives
  • global priority
  • limitations
  • drawbacks
  • potential benefits
  • government
  • international cooperation
  • investing
  • research and development
  • challenges
  • obstacles
  • transitioning
  • individuals
  • businesses
  • adopting
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