Shops should not be allowed to sell food and drinks tha are scientifically proven to be bad for people's health. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In today's world,
eating
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habits of many
people
are changed
as a result
of globalization. A far number of individuals have
a
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fond
to
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for
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newnormal
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new normal
new-normal
foods
. Most
of
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the
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scientific studies have shown that these edible items have an adverse effect on
human's
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health
thus
growing number of
people
argue to ban the outlets of
this
type
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of foods
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foods
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food
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. I would completely agree
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given statement.
To begin
with, most of the fast
foods
are
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available
in
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on
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the market
have
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a detrimental effect on
human
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body.S hop-keepers add several additives to make the dishes more delicious. It has been causing a lot of abominable diseases like cancer. Many researchers have found that instant
cusines
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cuisine
cuisines
contain many poisonous
incredients
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ingredients
such
as
aginomoto
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Ajinomoto
. It can cause
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life-threatening
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life threatening
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life-threatening
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moreover
it is one of the common
cause
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causes
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for
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cancer.
For instance
, a study in America has shown that 66%
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americans
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of americans
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has
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been becoming carcinogenic recently. Indeed , the Government should ban these
type
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types
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of
food
delivering
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shops.
Furthermore
,
closing
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of
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shops
who
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selling
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sell
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unwanted products will create more public awareness. Despite many
people
know
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knowing
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the gruesome impact of dishes on
health
but they consume the
food
many because of its's taste.
Eventually
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it can lead to
bad
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a bad
the bad
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health
condition
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conditions
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.
Now a days
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, due to excessive work
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schedule
schdule
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schedules
and lack of time a large number of
people
prefer to consume fast
food
.
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Conversely
, if the authorities prohibit the marketing of
foods
to
the
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society more and more
people
become aware
about
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of
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the serious concern
of
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the
food
thus
they avoid it.
For example
, in Japan healthy eating habits
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included in the school
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curriculum
curriculam
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curriculum
so children
has
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a formidable knowledge
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about
food
and
it's
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its
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consequences on
health
from childhood onwards. To conclude , instant
foods
have a vital role in many families. Most of these
foods
are really
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convenient
convient
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convenient
and ready to eat but it has a
drammatic
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dramatic
impact on
health
so government should
bann
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ban
these
type
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types
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of
food
outlets.
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