Shops should not be allowed to sell food and drinks tha are scientifically proven to be bad for people's health. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
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eating
habits of many Correct article usage
the eating
people
are changed as a result
of globalization. A far number of individuals have a
fond Remove the article
apply
to
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for
newnormal
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new normal
new-normal
foods
. Most of
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apply
the
scientific studies have shown that these edible items have an adverse effect on Correct article usage
apply
human's
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human
health
thus
growing number of people
argue to ban the outlets of this
type Change preposition
of foods
foods
. I would completely agree Fix the agreement mistake
food
the
given statement.
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with the
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with, most of the fast foods
are
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apply
in
the market Change preposition
on
have
a detrimental effect on Add the particle
to have
human
body.S hop-keepers add several additives to make the dishes more delicious. It has been causing a lot of abominable diseases like cancer. Many researchers have found that instant Add an article
the human
cusines
contain many poisonous Correct your spelling
cuisine
cuisines
incredients
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ingredients
such
as aginomoto
. It can cause Correct your spelling
Ajinomoto
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life-threatening
life threatening
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life-threatening
moreover
it is one of the common cause
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causes
for
cancer. Change preposition
of
For instance
, a study in America has shown that 66% Change the capitalization
Americans
americans
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of americans
has
been becoming carcinogenic recently. Indeed , the Government should ban these Change the verb form
have
type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
food
delivering
shops.
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delivery
Furthermore
, closing
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the closing
of
shops Change preposition
apply
who
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that
selling
unwanted products will create more public awareness. Despite many Wrong verb form
sell
people
know
the gruesome impact of dishes on Wrong verb form
knowing
health
but they consume the food
many because of its's taste. Eventually
it can lead to Add a comma
,Eventually
bad
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a bad
the bad
health
condition
. Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
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, due to excessive work Correct the word
Nowadays
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schedule
schdule
and lack of time a large number of Correct your spelling
schedules
people
prefer to consume fast food
. Coversely
, if the authorities prohibit the marketing of Correct your spelling
Conversely
foods
to the
society more and more Correct article usage
apply
people
become aware about
the serious concern Change the preposition
of
of
the Change preposition
apply
food
thus
they avoid it. For example
, in Japan healthy eating habits is
included in the school Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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curriculum
curriculam
so children Correct your spelling
curriculum
has
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have
a formidable knowledge
about Remove the article
formidable knowledge
a piece of formidable knowledge
food
and it's
consequences on Correct your spelling
its
health
from childhood onwards.
To conclude , instant foods
have a vital role in many families. Most of these foods
are really Correct your spelling
convenient
convient
and ready to eat but it has a Correct your spelling
convenient
drammatic
impact on Correct your spelling
dramatic
health
so government should bann
these Correct your spelling
ban
type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
food
outlets.Submitted by nairrohith719 on
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