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Shops should not be allowed to sell food and drinks tha are scientifically proven to be bad for people's health. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#shops #food #drinks #tha #people #health
In today's world,
eating
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 habits of many
people
 are changed
as a result
 of globalization. A far number of individuals have
a
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fond
to
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for
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newnormal
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new normal
new-normal
foods
. Most
of
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the
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scientific studies have shown that these edible items have an adverse effect on
human's
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human
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health
thus
 growing number of
people
 argue to ban the outlets of
this
 type
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of foods
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foods
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food
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. I would completely agree
the
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 given statement.
To begin
 with, most of the fast
foods
are
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available
in
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on
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 the market
have
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 a detrimental effect on
human
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the human
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 body.S hop-keepers add several additives to make the dishes more delicious. It has been causing a lot of abominable diseases like cancer. Many researchers have found that instant
cusines
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cuisine
cuisines
 contain many poisonous
incredients
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ingredients
such
 as
aginomoto
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Ajinomoto
. It can cause
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life-threatening
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life threatening
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life-threatening
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moreover
 it is one of the common
cause
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causes
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for
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of
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 cancer.
For instance
 , a study in America has shown that 66%
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americans
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of americans
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has
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have
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 been becoming carcinogenic recently. Indeed , the Government should ban these
type
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types
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 of
food
delivering
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 shops.
Furthermore
 ,
closing
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of
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apply
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shops
who
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that
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selling
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sell
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 unwanted products will create more public awareness. Despite many
people
know
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knowing
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 the gruesome impact of dishes on
health
 but they consume the
food
 many because of its's taste.
Eventually
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 it can lead to
bad
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a bad
the bad
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health
condition
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conditions
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.
Now a days
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, due to excessive work
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schedule
schdule
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schedules
 and lack of time a large number of
people
 prefer to consume fast
food
.
Coversely
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Conversely
 , if the authorities prohibit the marketing of
foods
 to
the
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apply
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society more and more
people
 become aware
about
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of
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 the serious concern
of
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the
food
thus
 they avoid it.
For example
 , in Japan healthy eating habits
is
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are
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 included in the school
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curriculum
curriculam
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curriculum
 so children
has
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have
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a formidable knowledge
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formidable knowledge
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 about
food
 and
it's
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its
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 consequences on
health
 from childhood onwards. To conclude , instant
foods
 have a vital role in many families. Most of these
foods
 are really
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convenient
convient
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convenient
 and ready to eat but it has a
drammatic
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dramatic
 impact on
health
 so government should
bann
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ban
 these
type
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types
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 of
food
 outlets.
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