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Some people think that schools should select students only according to their academic abilities while others believe that it is better to consider students’ other abilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There has been a controversy about whether schools should select students only according to their academic
abilities
. I think I would agree with
this
 argument, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
 and foremost. A
person
's academic
abilities
 can reflect his personal
abilities
 to a large extent. As we know, good
grades
 require unremitting efforts, and they are arduous to achieve.
For example
, you need to be patient, and you must have strong self-control.
Therefore
, it can be said that a
person
's academic
abilities
 can reflect his general personal skills substantially.
Besides
, a
person
's
grades
 are the most direct, and obvious way to examine a
person
's skills. There are hundreds and thousands of people vie with one another to get a place in a top
university
. Your
grades
 can influence the acceptance rate considerably.
Second
, the best students deserve the best educational resources. It's commonplace that a
student
 with brilliant
grades
 will be accepted by a good
university
. A
student
 with lower
grades
 is accepted by a worse
university
. I think
this
 decision is fair because the benefits can only be magnified with a
student
 can match with the school.
On the contrary
, if a "bad"
student
 goes to a top
university
, it's highly possible he is eliminated, not only because he can't catch up with his classmates, but
also
 because his talents don't support him to stay in
this
 stage.
On the other hand
, there should be more voices except for academic
abilities
.
For instance
, students' moral is a vital element as well. Take me as an example. One of my classmates from high school was famous for his talents and bad personality. He could score a high grade in every subject, but he was
also
 a problem kid that he constantly did many bad things,
such
 as smoking and playing fire. At
this
 point, a
student
's moral needs to be taken into consideration as well. In conclusion, I believe a
person
's academic
abilities
 are the most important standard, but there should be some places for other
abilities
.
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