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People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Human beings in
this
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 century live an excellent quality of
life
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 in comparison to the past centuries.
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 essay intends to compare both eras and in my
opinion
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 living standards have improved recently,
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 will be explained in the following paragraph with an example. Let's begin with an old adage, need is the mother of an invention.
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 means folks in the old centuries were surviving on whatever they had,
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,
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 was not enough for them to survive in day-to-day
life
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 with no proper housing, transportation, and
technology
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. Mostly, people were spending a tremendous amount of time doing laborious tasks without proper machines.
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, previously there was no
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,
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, farmers
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 their families were digging the land manually for several months in the hope of water.
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, some historians have written that pupils were walking several miles for schooling
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 the lack of proper transport facilities. In the recent era, transportation and technologies have made community
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 convenient.
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, people can commute easily from one place to another with the use of great infrastructure that connects multiple cities.
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, with evolving
technology
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person
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people
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 could finish the work efficiently in a shorter time. To add to
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, technologies like the
internet
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has
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 brought communities closer with
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 and easy ways of communication. To illustrate, a recent survey found that more than 80 per cent population around the globe has proper housing and living a better
life
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 with the use of
technology
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 that includes airways, the internet, mobile phones and medical equipment.
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, it's true that human beings are living a better lifestyle than folks from the 18th or 19th centuries. As mentioned above, I agree that
technology
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 has
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made
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 a great difference by improving the living standard and making the daily
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life
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lives
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 of people easy and convenient.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Quality of life
  • Technological advances
  • Healthcare systems
  • Life expectancy
  • Information access
  • Digital tools
  • Comfort and convenience
  • Modern conveniences
  • Mental health
  • Environmental degradation
  • Urbanization
  • Human rights
  • Social advancement
  • Life satisfaction
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