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Some movies are serious, designed to make the audience think. Other movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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In
this
 contemporary epoch, a section of society holds a belief that
movies
 are created just to fulfil
people
's leisure time.
Movies
 have numerous genres, and some folks commend that
action
movieaction
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movie action
movies action
movies
,
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 are
deaigned
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designed
 to make the audience wonder about themselves, while others opine that they are designed to entertain
people
. In my point of view, I prefer to watch
action
movies
 rather than any kind of
movie
. To commence with,
action
movies
 have lots of plot twists, and it makes
people
 feel astonishing
for
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 every single scene. To exemplify
further
, most of
time
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, there will be
the
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 fighting scene and
that is
 what makes it distinct from other
movie
 genres.
Therefore
,
this
 kind of
movie
 is not applicable to every age level, which means that most of the time, it is only for 18 years and above.
For instance
, Mission Impossible
,
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was nominated
one
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 of the best
action
movies
 for the Oscar Award.
On the other hand
, the ironic about
action
movies
are
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 a production usually hires well-known artists to play a major role.
Consequently
, it can
caught
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 many
people
's eyes on the
movie
, as it is
one
 of the marketing strategies.
in addition
, the role played by
a
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 artist is prominent since they
to
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ensure that the
movies
 can achieve the spectator's expectations. The
movies
 are more likely
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to target
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target
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at
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youngsters and adults compared to old folks because they are blindsided by
movies
' hype, chiefly on
the
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social media. In a nutshell, it is undeniable that
action
movies
 are
one
 of the best
movies'
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movies
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genre
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, but
on
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contrast
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 we cannot turn a blind eye to other
type
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types
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genres
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of genres
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 as every
one
 of them has
their
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 merits and demerits.
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