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School childern are becoming far too dependent on computers. This is having alarming effect on raeding and writing skills. Teachers need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all costs and go back to teaching basic study skills. Do you agree or disagree

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The modern world is totally based on technology.It is changing from day to time according to the needs of people.Every day new invention is developed.So we can imagine a life without the automation industry.The biggest invention of technology is
computers
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.It is used everywhere like schools,offices,banks,big and small organisations etc.Children are
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 becoming so dependent on
computers
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 that even their teachers need to avoid using them in the classroom and want to start basic study
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 because they are thinking that it should affect their reading and writing
skills
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. Even it sparks heated debate.But I am totally against it. In my opinion,
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computers
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 affect their writing as well as reading
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.But with one or two disadvantages we can not ignore its benefits.
Computers
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 make their study very simple. Whatever material they want they students easily get through the internet. In Covid ,pandemic it's not possible for them to attend classes.It should become possible only through the computer.Students attained their classes online.
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 it is very for children to learn with the help of
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 because they saw everything virtually.
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 their memory power becomes stronger.They can learn and remind everything fast and quickly. In the conclusion,we can not ignore its merits and should encourage our children to follow basic study
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