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Writing Samples
Band 8.5

You stayed with a local family when you participated in an exchange program in Ireland. You returned to your home country in a hurry and found that you had forgotten to take your laptop. Write a letter to the family and thank them for their hospitality. Describe your computer and where it is, and ask the host to send it back to you. You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Ben and May, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to thank you for your host during my exchange program in Ireland. It is an interesting and unforgettable memory for me that you taught me Irish culture and helped me adapt to the environment in Ireland. I still feel sorry that I had to return to my country in a hurry
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 my visa issue, so I couldn’t spend more time with you and get to know you better. Before the end of
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 letter, I would
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 like to ask you to do me a favour if you are convenient. I found that I forgot to take my laptop with me when I left. It has a grey metal case with some cartoon character stickers on it, and I remember I put it in the desk’s first drawer in the room you provided to me. I will be very grateful if you can send it back to me because there are many important documents stored in it. Again, thanks for taking care of me during my stay, and I expect to meet you again in the future. Kind regards, Georgiana Liu

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structure
Consider introducing clear paragraph separations to enhance readability and structure.
sentence variation
You might explore varying your sentence structures to add dynamism to your writing.
tone
Your tone is appropriately formal and grateful, fitting the situation well.
detail
The detailed description of the laptop ensures clarity in your request.
personal touch
Opening and closing the letter with personalized remarks adds a heartfelt touch.
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