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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do yoy think this is a positive or negative development?

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Recently,
alternative
 medicine has appeared to treat some medical issues and many
people
 tend to
rely
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 it
instead
 of visiting a hospital. In my ,view I think
this
 development has many cons like it may be an error in the diagnosis
although
 the
recovery
time
 is longer.
First
 of all, the diagnosis of the patient is considered so crucial and important
also
, it should not be any mistake in
this
 part because in many cases the
alternative
 treatment can lead to some mistakes.
This
 may happen because individuals who make these ways they have not enough skills to do these kinds of treatments.
For instance
, many
people
 who suffer from cancer tend to avoid chemical treatment. On top of that, they depend on natural ways to treat themselves so the rate of death among
people
 who don't like to visit doctors is higher because they got error diagnoses of their situation.
Secondly
, when
people
 depend on
alternative
 medicines, in most cases there is a lack of
recovery
time
 because ,in some diseases, individuals should take a medical tablet to increase the speed of
recovery
.
For example
, when
people
 get a headache if
people
 just depend on
alternative
 ways like drinking a healthy drink or eating some healthy thing, the
recovery
time
 may take all day and at
this
time
 they can not do anything because they suffer.
On the other hand
, when they use a tablet like PANADOL, the
recovery
time
 may take just 30 minutes. Overall,
people
 can not rely on just
alternative
 treatment without visiting hospitals or doctors because in most situations the
time
 of
recovery
 is so important beside that, in many ,cases they may be misdiagnosis so they should visit their doctor to check the diagnosis.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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