In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them ?

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It is a fact that in some nations especially western ones, the number of obese people has and is immensely increasing while the figure of healthy lifestyle leading individuals lessens. It is commonly known that a sedentary lifestyle and unhealthy eating habits are the main reason for

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obesity epidemic

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sweeping the world. There is no denying that desk-bound workers who spend at least 5 hours a day at their computers,

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have destroyed their health because of the lack of physical exercise which is a vast for developing diseases

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as stroke and of course obesity. I believe It is

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essential, to provide gyms and workout opportunities in workplaces.

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, employees should be allowed longer breaks and encouraged to use them for physical activity. Another special consideration, in

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case, is that healthy cuisine consumption patterns should not be neglected. As is known we live in

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really inconsistent world, correspondingly we find ourselves living

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fast-paced way of life which sometimes results in us reaching for a highly processed fast food hit thanks to its price and time consumption. Regular unhealthy nourishment ingestion can lead to depression, digestive issues, and being overweight.

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,in my opinion, the government should hearten people by creating a healthy eating-related ad campaign and include all the necessary knowledge for the students in schools and college curricula. In conclusion, consumption of highly processed cuisine and sedentary working styles cause obesity.

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, governments and inactive workplaces should do everything in their power to stop

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fatness epidemic.

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Topic Vocabulary:

sedentary
obesity
overweight
physical activity
sedentary lifestyle
exercise
unhealthy diet
fast food
urbanization
modernization
stress
awareness
education
government intervention
policies
promotion
sports
fitness programs
health education
taxation
public transportation
infrastructure
parks
recreational spaces

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