SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT READING BOOKS FOR ENTERTAINMENT IS A WASTE OF CHILDREN’S TIME. THEY THINK THAT THEIR CHILDREN SHOULD READ ONLY SERIOUS EDUCATIONAL BOOKS. WHAT IS YOUR OPINION

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It is believed by some that

children

should only read

books

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their education, while others think that comic

books

are

also

fundamental for the amusement of our little ones. The formers are more future-oriented, while the

latters

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latter

sustain a different approach. In my opinion, every child has the right to read everything he or she likes in the free time at their disposal.

However

, it is true that serious educational

books

are fundamental for the development of several skills

such

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one.

For instance

, the great

masterpieces '

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Pride and Prejudice' by Jane Austen is very useful in the understanding, not only of the Neoclassic Era

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but

also

the figures of speech and grammatic's rules. In fact, the

classicals

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classics

classical

are of immense importance if we only consider the educational

purpuses

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purposes

purpose

that they may possess. Even though

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every person should have read in their life at least ten masterpieces of the authors from their countries, I believe that

children

should not be obliged to do so

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such

a tender age. In fact, it would be really difficult for them to understand the

deeply

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meaning of those

books

, but

also

the hidden messages put in them. The famous book 'Le Petite Prince' by Anthoine de Saint Exuperie is considered perfect for

children

, but when you read it in adulthood, you understand so much more than it appears in the beginning.

Otherwise

, there are other authors, that are impossible to understand at

such

young age,

such

as Shakespeare or Wilde. In my opinion,

children

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free to read what they like and leave to teachers the choice to assign them more difficult readings. Childhood is

such

a brief period and they will have all the time to discover and read more serious

books

. Let the

children

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2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT READING BOOKS FOR ENTERTAINMENT IS A WASTE OF CHILDREN’S TIME. THEY THINK THAT THEIR CHILDREN SHOULD READ ONLY SERIOUS EDUCATIONAL BOOKS. WHAT IS YOUR OPINION

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Only governments can handle environmental problems as they are too great to be managed at individual level. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people believe that it is possible for a country to be economically successful and have a clean environment. Others argue that these two aims are not compatible. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some people believe that a gap year between school and university is a good idea, while others disagree strongly. Consider both sides of this debate and present your own opinion.