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In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those crimes?

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The world in the 21st is marked by a steady increase in the
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infringement
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, its key factors remain
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 of debate. In
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 solution for it. At
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, it is important to note that contrary to papular
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belief
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belief
, criminals have not been offended from
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beginnings
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, whilst,
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 variety
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 to have been made that. personally.
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family
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invironment
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environment
 that they have
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grown up in.
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, the most important influencer for
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avaiblability
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availability
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drugs
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drugs
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society,
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causing
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causing
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 in
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addicts
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 which gives rise to misconducts for exam robbery and fraud. by way of illustration,
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those who
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 have been
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addicts
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 to opium when
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opium
 is inaccessible,
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,
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addicts
addiction
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control
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.
Consequently
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, crime statics will go up. I mean free access to ingredients lays strong
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foundation
 for delinquency. Despite what has been discussed government should classify crimes and their roots and on the basis of
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 try to stop them.
For instance
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,
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tightening
lighting
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rules
rolls
 for contraband drugs,
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,
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cancelling
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sections
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 their characters up. These are some affecting factors
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 low breaking.
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, other contributors
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society
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society
 should not be neglected. To sum up, it is clear that not only are
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 crime in
world
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 but
also
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trend
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rate
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dramaticly
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dramatically
,
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unarguably
 if these didn't stop , society would be
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 more and more it had better government do primary prevention before treatment.
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