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The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What is the cause of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Nowadays, more and more
consumer
goods
 are manufactured,
more
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and more
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 damage has been inflicted
to
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on
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 the
environment
.
Although
 there will
be undoubtedly be
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undoubtedly be
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 some negative consequences of
this
 trend, individuals and government can take steps to mitigate these potential problems. There are two main reasons why the growth of the
consumer
goods
 industry is related to the
environment
.
Firstly
, manufacturing
consumer
goods
 need a lot of materials, but after the production is completed, the
waste
 materials will be discharged into the
environment
.
This
 means it will destroy the natural
environment
,
all
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and all
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 living species occupying the habitat will have reduced breeding capacity;
thus
 populations will decline, and extinction becomes more likely.
Secondly
, the appearance of
factories
 and companies decreases the natural lands, including forests and villages, which means people will lose an amount of oxygen from
trees
.
Moreover
, it can cause a greenhouse effect because the exhaust fumes from
factories
 emit too much,
the
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trees
 are cut down. There are several actions that governments could take to solve the problems described above. Governments should impose strict laws related to
discharge
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the discharge
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 of
waste
 to manufacturers. If the amount of
waste
 and exhaust fumes
are
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is
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 higher than the regulatory amount, the
factories
 or companies have to be punished.
This
 leads to governments controlling
waste
 and minimizing pollution. The other solution is that the government can request and encourage
factories
 and citizens to grow
trees
.
As a result
, it can be balanced for the number of
trees
. In conclusion, various measures can be taken to tackle the problems that are certain to arise as the manufacture of
consumer
goods
 increases.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production
  • consumer goods
  • natural environment
  • damage
  • causes
  • overconsumption
  • demand
  • environmental regulations
  • enforcement
  • natural resources
  • industrial pollution
  • waste
  • inadequate
  • waste management practices
  • public awareness
  • education
  • sustainable alternatives
  • stricter environmental laws
  • recycling
  • responsible consumption
  • clean technologies
  • renewable energy
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