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People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Change
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 is the only constant in our lives, in
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 everything modifies
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continuously
continuosly
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continuously
, even if we do not want to. Some
people
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 are really afraid of things they can not understand or that are different from what they originally
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, but the only solution is to embrace them. There are several reasons that could explain
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 attitude, ranging from culture to mentality,
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however
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 the main cause is the fear of
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the unknown
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. 
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, the main problem that can
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arise
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 in
people
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 afraid of
change
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 is that they will
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lose
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loose
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 so many beautiful things that could happen to them.
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, job safety is very valuable these days and lots of
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 believe that sticking with one company or one job for their entire lives is the best choice, but it was proven that changing jobs frequently would increase salaries and mental wellbeing.
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, society is moving fast and if you do not keep up with it, you will lose attachment with reality and find yourself in a big scary world.
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, a possible solution for these
people
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 is to search for the help of a professional, in order to overcome their fears. Even if,
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psychological
psycological
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psychological
 therapy may seem a huge step, it will actually help to face problems and accept others as they are. Sometimes it is very difficult to embrace the unknown or to
change
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 your mentality
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 something your parents taught you, but only intelligent human beings are able to
change
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 their minds.
Psycologists
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Psychologists
 can make you face your deepest fears, which can be very scary and frightful, but it is the only way to overcome your own limits. In conclusion,
change
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 is everywhere, in
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 it is the only constant
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throughout
througout
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throughout
 our life, and if we do not accept it, we will live sad and empty existences. Even if, many problems have to be faced and the path is long and full of difficulties, I still
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that anyone is able to overcome them.
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