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Plastic bags，plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

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It is undoubtedly that more and more people focus on how to
use
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plastic
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 packaging. Some people believe that it is bad for the environment, while others agree that it is convenient to
use
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. From my point of view, I think we don't
use
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plastic
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 material. To commence with,
plastic
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 material products
such
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 as drinking bottles, proposal bags, and candy packaging will pollute the earth.
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, a lot of
land
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 will not be available for farming. As we know,
plastic
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 molecules are hard to decompose,
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,
a
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in a
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recent article published by The Scientist, there will need 100 years to decay any
plastic
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 things even if they are buried under the earth.
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, any
plastic
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 items will infect our human physical health.
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, there will be more toxic meat or
fish
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 carried with
plastic
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 pushed into the human food chain. Think about that, a fisherman catches a
fish
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 that ate a small worm
who
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that
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 has eaten a
plastic
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 cover, and he sells that
fish
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 to market, after that, the customer
buy
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buys
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 the
fish
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 and
eat
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eats
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 it which has
plastic
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 remains. People will feel sick or get
the
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a
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 digestive disease if
he
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they
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 eat much pollutant seafood or something like that.
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 some potential impacts are brought by using Eco-friendly packaging, I still reckon that using not
including
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plastic
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 material bottles and bags is very good for our environment's development. In conclusion, never should we neglect what we have discussed above, I firmly hold the view that we need to
use
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 Eco-friendly bags and packaging to leave a better environment for our offspring.4
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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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