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Some people think the government should pay for health care and education, but other people claim that it is the individual‘s responsibility. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #health #care #education #individual‘s #responsibility
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 era,
education
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 and
health
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 are the most important part for every individual.
However
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, many believe that the
government
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 should pay for
health
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 care and
education
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, while others think that it's a duty of an individual. I strongly agree that
government
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 should step in and pay for our well-being and
education
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 by introducing some policies for poor and middle-class
people
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.
Firstly
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,
health
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 is a very important sector and the majority of poor
people
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 are suffering from viral diseases like, dengue, food poisoning, malaria, etc,
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, research from HSM college of Bhopal showed data that 75% of
people
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 who are living in a rural area are diagnosed by dengue,
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,
people
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 in Mumbai who are struggling with money crises, and in order to save money, they eat street food rather than a healthy home-cooked meal, which later causes the problem of food poisoning.
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, the
government
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 should start some special programs which can provide quarterly
health
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 checkups to these
people
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 and should
also
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 open more
government
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 hospitals where all kinds of treatments are free.
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, the major cause of poverty is lack of
education
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, today cost of
education
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 is growing rapidly, and citizens who don't enough money for their offspring's
education
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, later parents don't educate their children and force them to support their families. These kids start doing jobs at a very young age and later they may
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 become criminals,
for example
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, in Mumbai when a policeman asked a jewel thief; why he is doing
this
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, the man replies, that because of poverty and unemployment. To stop these rising problems, the authorities should start free
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 programs and make sure that every little one is getting proper
education
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 by doing some audits in the authority school and in poor areas. To conclude,
health
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 and
education
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 will always be an important part of every nation, and it is our authority's job to take steps by opening more
government
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 hospitals and free
education
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 centres, which later help the nation's economy.
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