University should accept the equal number of male and female student in each subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement

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It is believed by many people that educational institutes must enrol both males and females equally in each subject. I completely disagree with
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statement by supporting my viewpoints in the following paragraphs based on the fact that educational admissions must be merit-based as compared to gender equality .
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, some professions and associated fields of study are inappropriate for women, especially if physical labour is involved, which lowers interest in the area of study.
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, a female construction engineer may become upset after spending several hours working physically taxing outdoor jobs.
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annoyance may result in disinterest and weaken the effectiveness of their working method.
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, a reserved quota for females would be discrimination against talented male students. College education must be based on talents and performance and not based on gender. In reality, equality is a fanciful idea but will deprive many
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students. If there is natural selection based on talents, it will not only benefit the talented pupils but
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will be beneficial for society.
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, IIT graduates who were selected purely based on their merits are today's CEOs in well-known companies
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as Google, Microsoft, etc.
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, the university should not limit selection criteria considering gender equality
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but must be based on talented and passionate students thereby benefiting society around the globe.
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approach will make use of the best talents to unleash the inner potential of the youngsters and upcoming generations, which will be a game changer around the globe.
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