Some people claim that workers should wear uniforms. Others allege that people should be free in their choice. Discuss both opinions, and give your own opinion.

There is a debate concerning about
dress
code for workers, and whether they should wear
uniform
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uniforms
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or
free
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their choice. I believe that it is quite important to wear working
outfits
. Analysing the benefit of wearing formal
dress
, as well as the drawback for that will prove
this
. On the one hand, it is a good way to show
people
’s attitude towards their job.
For example
,
people
always need to participate in some business activities, like
business
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meeting
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or visiting other companies. Wearing working
outfits
cannot only show their professional career ability but
also
give them more confidence,
this
might keep a good impression
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another person.
Therefore
,
this
makes it clear that
people
will be beneficial from wearing formal
dress
.
On the other hand
,
people
might feel uncomfortable
to wear
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such
kind of uniform.
For example
, it is not easy to travel to other cities by public transportation
such
as bus, train and airport. The space of seats might
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small,
this
would let them feel tired or inconvenient if they wear working
outfits
to travel. But
people
will overcome
this
drawback if they have business travelling as much as possible. In conclusion, the benefit of wearing working
outfits
overweight its drawback, so it is quite significant to have a formal
dress
code for workers.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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