People believe that individuals who make a lot of money are the most successful. Others say that those who contribute to society like scientists, teacher are the most successful. Discuss both and give your opinion?

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To
work
for society and for the
people
is the best opportunity to have and
this
will be an incredible thing if we are working as scientists, teachers, doctors and other various roles.
Therefore
, in my opinion, I concur with the statement that
people
who contribute to society are more successful than those individuals who make a lot of money. I think
this
way for two reasons, which I will explore in
this
essay.
Firstly
,
to begin
with, I would like to say that success is not only to
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a lot of money,
however
, doing good
work
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society in any form is far much better than that. My own experience is a compelling example of
this
. I am working in a multinational company with a good salary and I am satisfied with my
work
and with my working environment. I
also
get a chance to
work
with an NGO, which is working for the education of needy ones, who are not able to go to school. I weekly go there and teach the students.
This
volunteer
work
gives me so much satisfaction that
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I will count myself more successful in teaching those kids rather than working in the company. Aside from that,
Secondly
, success is
also
when we are
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happy
haapy
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happy
in our
life
, I have seen many
people
who are very rich but they are not happy at all, their social circle is
also
not broad. Being happy is the most significant thing in
life
.
For instance
, In my office, my colleague
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to his home
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every Friday to meet his parents and he
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back on Sunday evening. He says that after meeting his family members every week he feels so refreshed and awesome and happy. In conclusion, I believe that doing some good
work
for the
people
and having happiness around us is the most precious thing in
life
.
As a result
, our
life
becomes more successful and full of happiness.
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