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Some people say that no one should do the same job forever while others believe that doing the same job is beneficial for the individual, company and society. Discuss both view and give your opinion?

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job
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 infrequently can impact badly in
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people
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’s daily life which can destroy a person’s carrier. Some individuals hold the
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 that everyone should
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 their
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, while others argued with them that a
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job
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 has
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 of benefits for
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 and
also
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company
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the company
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 as well as for society. In
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 I will analyse both aspects and my opinion is that changing
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 once or twice in a persona carrier is fine but infrequently can be dangerous.
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 with, those who are in favour of
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 hopping think that
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 can be more experienced with the changing of
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.
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, they can acquire
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 of new
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skills
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 which can help them in
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further
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a further
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stage
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stages
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 of life.
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whose
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who
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 changed
work
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 once to another, with the starting of every new
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,
they
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have to face different situations
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as a result
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 they become more strong and intelligent.
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, a person who
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work
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 in a private
company
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 and
then
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go
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 to a
company
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 of government has faced
to
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 types of environment which may help him to acquire more knowledge and be more skilled.
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, the more different
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 you faced, the more skill you will have.
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, some
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 think doing one
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 is better than changing
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jobs
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. The main reason is that doing
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in
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 longtime
provide
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provides
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 more chance to get
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a promotion
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 which is more important in a person’s life. It’s
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 achievement of one person’s employing-carrier provided that
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a lot
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 of encouragement which help them to do
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work
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 with more
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attention
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.
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, when employers
rewarded
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for
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them for
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his
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works
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, he/she
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work
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 with more joy and fulfil all the needs that a
company
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 expect
on
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 them resulting in
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company
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the company
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 will
developed
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 their
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business
buisness
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business
.
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, if a
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company
compamy
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company
 will grow
his
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its
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 profit, a nation or society gets
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an advantage
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 as well. Because of
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, some
people
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 say to not
change
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 a
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 continuously. To sum up,
changing
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 has some positive aspects as well as more negativity. While some
people
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 say every
people
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 should
change
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work
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 routinely,
other
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others
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 think a fixed
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 has
lots
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 of benefits. In my opinion, it is better to stick
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job
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 and
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with
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your best to
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develop
develope
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develop
 your position. But an occasional
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change
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 is acceptable. Because in
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today's
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todays
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today's
 world the number of unemployed
people
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 is more than the number of
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. So, there is a possibility to find
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it difficult
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 to
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a
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work
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.

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career development
  • personal growth
  • self-discovery
  • skill acquisition
  • adaptability
  • versatility
  • stagnation
  • expertise
  • specialization
  • workplace relationships
  • company culture
  • teamwork
  • cohesion
  • stability
  • continuity
  • long-term planning
  • mentor
  • unemployment rates
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