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Buying things on the internet, suhc as books, air ticket and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advanatges of shopping this way outweigh the disadvantges.

Nowadays, due to
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advancements
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advancements
 in technologies more and more
people
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 prefer tobuyheir
things
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such
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 as books, air tickets and groceries over the
internet
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. The main
advantages
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 of
this
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 trend are that
people
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 can save
their
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valuable
time
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 and they have many options over
one
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 item, while the main disadvantages are that have
a
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delivery issues and
payment
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 problems. In my opinion, the
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benefits of
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 way
shopping
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 outweigh the drawbacks and, I will explain my reason for it. On the
one
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 hand, there are many
advantages
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 of buying
things
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 on the
internet
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.
First
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 and foremost,
people
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 can save
time
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 which they spend
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 the distance to go to local shops and malls.
Secondly
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, there are many options for
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 product from shopping online.
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, If
people
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 shop
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 the
internet
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 they get a
number
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 of choices on
one
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 product, which is not possible
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 way
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in
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local shops or malls.
Also
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, buying
things
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 especially grocery products on the
internetpeople
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internet people
 got a
number
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 of offers on purchasing any
items
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.
For example
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, Flipkart Quick, an application for grocery
items
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, deals with
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number
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a number
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 of grocery products along with a "buy
one
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 get
one
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 free" offer,and
as a result
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, more and more individuals prefer to buy their household
things
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 from the
internet
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.
On the other hand
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, despite some
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advantages
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 it has
also
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 some drawbacks.
Firstly
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, purchasing
things
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 online have delivery issues. To illustrate
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, some
items
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 are taking a long
time
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 to deliver for that reason, some individuals hesitated to buy their
things
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 on the
internet
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.
Secondly
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,
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 issue,
payment
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 on the
internet
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 is difficult,
this
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 is because of network issues.
For instance
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, sometimes
payment
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 is completed but the order is not done, and
as a result
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,
people
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 are facing a
number
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 of problems.
Furthermore
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, in
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some cases
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some cases
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 damaged
items
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 are delivered and
people
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 lost the money which they spent on them. But these problems can be solved by up to date about online shopping platforms and
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 careful regarding payments. In conclusion, buying
things
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 on the
internet
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 have many benefits along with some drawbacks.
However
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, in my opinion,
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 think that buying
things
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 from the online market has many
advantages
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 than demerits because
people
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 save their
time
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 and they got a
number
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 of options on
one
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 item along with offers.

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