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At the present, the population of some countires includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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The mean age of each county is the main factor that will bring pros and cons for the society,
however
, both young and elderly nations have own advantages vs disadvantages, but, the role of youngers has not
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,
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alongside
, each country needs to
olders
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holders
 for transmitting values to
next
 generation, so, I will explore on
this
 issue in upcoming paragraphs. At
first
, it has been known a main feature of
jouniors
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juniors
 is
flexible
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 mindset ,according to results of the scientific investigation in China where the
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majority of papulation are young ,scientists designed two groups that were different
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 their ages,after that, young population faced with many problems and they should solve these, in the end, they have shown more flexibility to create a solution than older group, so,
this
 characteristic was played a major role in possible conflictions in their community.
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, fresh people have built
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atmosphere
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atmosphere
, so, due to
this
 environment the tension and
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hope
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hopeless
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and the mortality rate will be decreased,
for example
, Japanese psychologists claimed
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 children can be able to remove
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from their grandparents, in
also
, their nephew can
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 to them for progressing in their life, so, both
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 has been needed for
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community
 and balancing between their numbers will produce hope and confidence. To summarize
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, young nations are more optimistic and bring more solutions while
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elderly
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the elderly
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community
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 are the
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 for youngers.
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