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In some countiries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for some people. Why might this be the case? Do you thing it is a positive or negative situation?

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People
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 from a bunch of countries around the globe live in their
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house
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houses
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instead
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 of renting them. Having your own
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 can be a huge benefit but it comes with some costs.
This
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 essay will discuss the positive situations of having to live in your own
house
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 rather than renting it to someone else. There are a handful of benefits when it comes to having your own
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.
After
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 the pandemic, the economic system has not been stable and
renting
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 prices are way too high. Having to live in your own
house
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 will save you financially . In
this
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 way, you can save a lot of money and use them to purchase something else in the future.
People
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 who live in
renting
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 places do not have the authority to transform the place they are living. They always have to ask permission from the owner. When
people
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 live in their own
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, they can do anything they want with their
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.
People
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 can make decorations as they want with their belongings without any fear or hesitation. The negative
situations
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situation
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 of owning a
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starts
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 with civilians’ life-long enemy “tax”. Governments around the world will take anything their hands can reach in order to make the economic system
running
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 starting from taxing every
houses
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. With
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 rule, every citizen has to pay their respective government money for the houses they owned.
Moreover
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, someone who
rent
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rents
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 their
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 can have a regular cash flow by renting them to
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apply
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others.
For
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In
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 conclusion, it can be seen that owning a
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 comes with multiple disadvantages and a handful of benefits. Despite the disadvantages, owning a
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give
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 you the benefit of having a place for shelter in any given situation.
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