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Some people think that intelligent student should teach separately whereas others think that everyone should teach together. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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The idea behind demarcating more academically able learners from those who are not at par with them is a common situation in many learning environments. My essay would analyse both styles of teaching and provide my thoughts on
this
 method
Firstly
,from the perspective of the smarter pupils . They may become easily bored and detached from their learning if they find the material too easy.
This
 seems to be the case when different cohorts, without similar IQ ,levels are placed together in the same learning space.
For example
, in the popular series, it is clearly illustrated that he is bored and finds the work a waste of his precious time.
Although
,
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grouping
students
 in
such
 a way would lead to a situation where the
schools
 with the very academic admission would consistently perform better due to the rigorous exams they would have to take to get in,
this
 would lead to an imbalance in district
schools
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 performance.
For instance
, the 11-plus exam that is taken by pupils in kent, filters the best
students
 into the Grammar
schools
 , leaving the other less able
students
 in other
schools
.
On the other hand
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this
 argument, if
students
 are grouped on the basis of their knowledge, and not subject based. It would lead to a situation where their maximum potential can be developed
further
 and nurtured rather than curtailed. Take a look at the movie Spencer, he thrived in the university even though he was just 8 years old.
Additionally
, it would allow the teachers to work at the pace of their pupils and provide the appropriate materials needed to achieve
this
. In Conclusion, I would say I find myself in the middle of
such
 a school of thought, it has both pros and cons and I struggle to be on one side of
this
 discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic performance
  • individual needs
  • tailor-made
  • enriching experience
  • diversity
  • collaborative learning
  • equality
  • inclusive education
  • differentiated instruction
  • personalized approach
  • homogeneous groups
  • intellectual stimulation
  • interpersonal skills
  • critical thinking
  • peer interaction
  • self-confidence
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